Tonight Bjorn Brudberg of dVerse Poets Pub has offered the challenge of including this sequence – unaltered except perhaps by punctuation – from the poem ‘After Someone’s Death’ by the Swedish Nobel Laureate Tomas Tranströmer (1931-2015) in a prose offering of 144 words.
all of the names swallowed up by the cold
Here goes:
I don't know for how many further hours they questioned him, there in the slatted pine hut at the end of the one-way track. How many cigarettes they taunted him with, blowing fog and spume of empty shorelines around his patrician nose, against his exhausted thirsty skin, the ice tundra of his jaw.
These days I can't dwell any longer on the price he paid on the Tree, by the time they had coaxed and ogled him for clues; riddled him for connections; mocked him for contacts.
They had obtained every single one, all of the names.
Swallowed up by the cold reality that slapped my face like sleet, I gulped at the thin air inside the phone kiosk, and tried to blank out the image of his gargle-tortured face, the anguished twining of those familiar hands, the twist and swing of his feet.
© Kathy Labrum McVittie 11 March 2024

“the ice tundra of his jaw” and “his gargle-tortured face” Interesting descriptions!
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I got a bit carried away, didn’t I? Scandi moir! Thanks for reading x
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I like them!
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What a terrible experience, and how he gave them all the names in the end… I hope he could die, knowing that he at least had given some false leads to his tormenters.
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thank you for your compassion Björn. Sometimes it’s hard to remember that this is “only a story”.
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This is very thought provoking. So many brilliant images, from the ice tundra of his jaw to his swinging feet.
I enjoyed this bit of writing. Good job.
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Thank you for your encouraging response, which led me happily to your beautiful blog Yvonne. Win win x
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Fan~friggin’~tastic! You’ve written a gripping portrayal of the psychological toll of betrayal and the overwhelming weight of guilt and helplessness.
~David
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Whoa – thank you kindly David! It just came out all of a gush, with just a few extensions to bring it to the magic 144 words.
Only today I was seeing how skilfully you encourage other writers – Yvonne’s work it was – and now I am blushing happily!
PS I am having difficulty navigating your site to find dVers-ifications. Instead overwhelmed by the weight of lusscious writing and themes, so I don’t persevere … my issue not yours… forgive me!
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Kathy, such vivid descriptions of things we know have happened to others, when morals and ethics have flown far.
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As ever, i feel seen by you, Lisa. Thank you for your witness x
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❤
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“the ice tundra of his jaw,” is such a strong and apt image! Well done! 🩷🩷
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Thank you Sanaa! I think you have experience of such ecosystems…
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