Hastily responding to a challenge from De at dVerse to include a “gasp” in our creation of just, and exactly, 44 words.
I ask myself, is a gasp merely an intake of breath or is there in its startle, its awe, a premonition of the desire for sublimation?
A grasp, perhaps, after fulfilment? (A grasp is just a gasp with an ‘r’ in the mouth)
And a gasp without the sibilant opens up a gap. There are some other wordy wriggles to work with, another time.
On with the quadrille
putting myself to bed
to relax into perfumed warm
waters that don’t cost the earth;
to dry my tender skin
on clean hot towels;
to smooth and anoint my feet
with healing;
to fold again into sheets;
cool pillow to restore my soul –
O gasping for home
© Kathy Labrum McVittie 7 March 2023
That sounds divine, Kathy ❤
~David
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homesick? I can relate so bad to this!!
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That last line, Kathy, left me pondering.
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Oh my this is so poignant!!
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The last line of your poem is a wonderful use of the word, but your preamble stopped me in my tracks:
“(A grasp is just a gasp with an ‘r’ in the mouth)”
SO good.
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Ah De, I am glad the preamble wasn’t a wordiness too far!
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Well done, hasty or not. 🙂
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