linda Lee Lyberg of dVerse Poets Pub has invited us to submit a poem including “morning” and in the Quadrille form – 44 words excluding title.
My mind nodded to Gerard Manley Hopkins’ poem ‘The Windhover’ (about the British bird, the Kestrel) for some reason, though my heart went out to the shorebirds here, dead from Avian Flu and pounded by waves, buried in blown sand.
I’m just telling you this so that you think of Hopkins’ “morning’s minions” as poetic, rather than as one-eyed cartoon characters…
fractured pinions late encountered morning's minions; drooping wing and fractured pinions; slooping round the Bay as terns. gone the English sheep, the querns. call the cows, the calves, the wether; thistle down among the heather. Lord MacAonghais, make your claim speak out in your Gaelic name © Kathy Labrum McVittie 22 August 2022
What a sad thing to see.
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Yes, it’s been so distressing and particullarly for our local Blue highland Bird Rescue Centre who have to refuse new additions so as to protect their long stay residents such as owls
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Lovely! The flowing grace of your words makes the tragic image even more so by contrast.
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Blushing to hear you say thi, Susan – flowing grace is what I aspire to …
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😊 💜
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Your poem reads like an incantation, swirling up from the sea.
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I second Lisa’s comment ~ That was the feeling that you left me with, Kathy!
❤
David
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How apposite that you say this, David! Last weekend I was walking past seals at the edge of the sea, and when one called to me I stood a while and sang back – a rippling ululating sort of incantation, which they seemed to enjoy!
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I enjoyed your gentle couplets, Kathy, and the alliteration in ‘morning’s minions’ to enhance the idea of early waking, as well as the internal rhyme of ‘drooping/slooping’.
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Really appreciating this analysis, Kim – especially as I produced this quadrille in a rapid burst of what I call “pheasant energy” – impulsive and short-lived… Thank you x
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I love that, ‘pheasant energy’ – we get them in our garden!
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slooping! The rhyming worked wonders. Enjoyed the read.
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Thank you so much … the slooping came from memories of seaside tales in children’s comics… isn’t a sloop a sort of yacht?
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Didn’t recognise the word, but you are right. Smiles!
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I really love the sound of this poem… I would like to hear it read…
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now that’s a compliment, Bjorn… and I’d like to read it for you … along with others
Currently my website doesn’t have the add-ons to support … and my head hurts with anything Tech at the moemnt, duh!
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